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[AF: Abduction]

Probe.

Not bad. Liked your sense of timing, (and the dodgy northern accent at the beginning).

jonohomo responds:

i hope its not dodgy - i am northern lol
Thanks for commenting!

[Cow Owns Bird]

needs a bit more sound

Needs some more ambient noise. They're in the open air, should be able to hear more stuff. And that milk squirt needs a sploodge noise or something, but other than that, great. Nice character designs too (:

ptracy responds:

Great suggestion to keep in mind for COB 2.0!

[My Very First Animations]

could be a lot better

The action in your animation is quite slow and not overly dynamic. You haven't quite got enough difference between slow movement and fast movement, and this tends to make everything feel a bit clunky and unnatural. There's also no sense of weight. When the stick guy falls over, for example, he doesn't hit the ground with enough of a visual 'thud'. Again this is to do with timing and could be easily improved by a little practice, watching the movement of people in real life/in films.

When you see someone fall over/run/do something that you want to happen in your animation, try and count out how many seconds it takes for them to complete that action in real time. That should help you work out how many frames it takes to show this action when drawing it. or something.

At the same time, fairly nice menu, and you can definitely see improvement in what you're doing from the first animation to the last. So, yeah. Keep going (:

Ggd07 responds:

Thanks mate.. All you say is true..
The thing is i have already been through most of the things you are saying..
The Visual "thud", The natural movement, easing,gravity.. And i always check in real life, to make it in the animation, tho i still have alot to clean
These animations are one year old... tho, you kinda helped me in another way:)
If you want check my other animation, Its new and.. i show most of my skills there, you can see its improved:) , Check It if you want:)

Thanks again:)

~Ggd07

[Recess]

tree!

Please oh please tell me that you're going to work more on this. The background art is beautiful and the concept is really nice. But the animation is so rough and choppy and animatic-like, it sort of ruins the prettiness of it.

Just a little more smoothness, a few more frames to add some detail to the movement would make this a million times better. Like a few leaves on the trees rustling, a few fframes more on the dogs wagging their tails, etc. I can see you've already put loads of time into this, but it'd be so worth putting a bit more in to see it through to the end.

maxscomputer responds:

first, thanks very much for the review!

second: unfortunately, i don't have any plans for reworking this any time in the foreseeable future. i know the animation was pretty lackluster, i'm not ashamed to say it--but i'll save the improvements for future projects. this was more of a 'dry run,' to see if i could get some ideas i wanted to express in flash form. i'm happy with it in some ways and unhappy in others, but i learned a lot and look forward to incorporating what i've learned into bigger and better things. again, thanks for the review!

-max

[Animation Collection]

Not too shabby

For a first semester this is pretty good. You got the bounce on that first ball really well and I like the cattail thingy.

It seems you're still getting to grips with weight, though. Difficult stuff, I'm trying to get my head around it at the moment too. The bit where the guy is hopping from one rock to the next highlights this because his footsteps - considering he's quite a fat bloater - seem a little too light. He also doesn't quite sway and swerve enough when he's trying to regain his balance for it to be quite convincing enough. It's really, really close, but just misses the mark.

You're really good at keeping volumes constant, though. That's very impressive. The things you draw look very solid.

Thanks for uploading (:

Nigel-of-the-Drakes responds:

Thanks, yeah weight is not the easiest. These are things gone over in my critiques, but I didn't have time to fix them. Hopefully next semester I'll get a bit better. Good luck to you in your endeavors.

[pigeon]

Nice artwork

But a touch repetetive. This would be greatly improved by a bit of chewing action. Maybe some pigeon juices squelching down that guy's chin? The soundtrack is great.

PancakeBreakfast responds:

wow, you liked the sound! crazy guy. thanks for the review. Yeh I could have added more stuff but, i was tired and it was late and i was busy and i broke my hand and my mother fell down the stairs and.. ha

[DepressionCounter]

tick tock

emo clock indeed. Nice, simple little idea. Well executed (I kind of like the font you chose for the clock and the hundedths-of-a-second-run-down thing was a nice touch.)

liable-to-explode responds:

tick tock, it's the emo clock! XD

[Fishy gets high]

mmm. Could've been a lot better.

Okay, just watched this through a couple of times.

Given, the humour is purile. Nothing wrong with that. It's kind of what this place thrives on. But the jokes didn't really come across thanks to a few things, like the timing, which was fairly even-paced and therefore a bit on the dull side. There's no real plot either. Also, the default computer synth voices were kind of irritating and instantly put me off, too. The thing also ended really, really suddenly and felt seriously unfinished.

I've had a quick look around the rest of your submissions and there's some potential in the stuff you've submitted. 6 random pieces of shit kind of raised a smile, and crab murder's kinda fun. I also see you're only 14, and considering that you've got loads of scope. So keep it up. Hope to see something better than this again soon.

mothballs responds:

Thanks much, this is possibly the best review I've ever gotten. :)

[The Bunny Suicides]

Not bad

I rather enjoyed this. Always loved the books, too.

Couple of things. Your timing could be a little better with some of the gags. The wishing well one, for example, felt a little rushed. it also would have been cool if you'd put your own spin on the drawings, rather than aping Riley's drawing style. But in general it was solid. Made me smile. I particularly liked the second one. Very well executed :D

KungFu-Gerbil responds:

Yeah the 2nd one was one of my favorites too.
We're glad you liked the movie. Take it easy matey :)