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[Recess]

tree!

Please oh please tell me that you're going to work more on this. The background art is beautiful and the concept is really nice. But the animation is so rough and choppy and animatic-like, it sort of ruins the prettiness of it.

Just a little more smoothness, a few more frames to add some detail to the movement would make this a million times better. Like a few leaves on the trees rustling, a few fframes more on the dogs wagging their tails, etc. I can see you've already put loads of time into this, but it'd be so worth putting a bit more in to see it through to the end.

maxscomputer responds:

first, thanks very much for the review!

second: unfortunately, i don't have any plans for reworking this any time in the foreseeable future. i know the animation was pretty lackluster, i'm not ashamed to say it--but i'll save the improvements for future projects. this was more of a 'dry run,' to see if i could get some ideas i wanted to express in flash form. i'm happy with it in some ways and unhappy in others, but i learned a lot and look forward to incorporating what i've learned into bigger and better things. again, thanks for the review!

-max

[Animation Collection]

Not too shabby

For a first semester this is pretty good. You got the bounce on that first ball really well and I like the cattail thingy.

It seems you're still getting to grips with weight, though. Difficult stuff, I'm trying to get my head around it at the moment too. The bit where the guy is hopping from one rock to the next highlights this because his footsteps - considering he's quite a fat bloater - seem a little too light. He also doesn't quite sway and swerve enough when he's trying to regain his balance for it to be quite convincing enough. It's really, really close, but just misses the mark.

You're really good at keeping volumes constant, though. That's very impressive. The things you draw look very solid.

Thanks for uploading (:

Nigel-of-the-Drakes responds:

Thanks, yeah weight is not the easiest. These are things gone over in my critiques, but I didn't have time to fix them. Hopefully next semester I'll get a bit better. Good luck to you in your endeavors.

[pigeon]

Nice artwork

But a touch repetetive. This would be greatly improved by a bit of chewing action. Maybe some pigeon juices squelching down that guy's chin? The soundtrack is great.

PancakeBreakfast responds:

wow, you liked the sound! crazy guy. thanks for the review. Yeh I could have added more stuff but, i was tired and it was late and i was busy and i broke my hand and my mother fell down the stairs and.. ha

[Swimming With Pigs]

Tee hee

That was great fun. Loved the character design and the presenter scientist guy almost seemed to have a bit of a stephen fry lilt to his voice. Which in my opinion is always a major plus.

Really good job.

[DepressionCounter]

tick tock

emo clock indeed. Nice, simple little idea. Well executed (I kind of like the font you chose for the clock and the hundedths-of-a-second-run-down thing was a nice touch.)

liable-to-explode responds:

tick tock, it's the emo clock! XD

[OGC Logo Rotated]

hmm

They showed this on Have I Got News For You last night (dunno if you're a UK dweller).

Funny observation, but seen it before. Good you spotted it too though.

[Crab murder]

harr.

Heh. Short and to the point. Alright so it's not the most insightful story ever told, but I kinda like a bit of base violence. Timing was good too. Liked the scream at the end.

Shame you couldn't get rid of the white block around the crab. But as it's only a short, doesn't matter too much.

Sort of makes me think of rathergood.com

[Fishy gets high]

mmm. Could've been a lot better.

Okay, just watched this through a couple of times.

Given, the humour is purile. Nothing wrong with that. It's kind of what this place thrives on. But the jokes didn't really come across thanks to a few things, like the timing, which was fairly even-paced and therefore a bit on the dull side. There's no real plot either. Also, the default computer synth voices were kind of irritating and instantly put me off, too. The thing also ended really, really suddenly and felt seriously unfinished.

I've had a quick look around the rest of your submissions and there's some potential in the stuff you've submitted. 6 random pieces of shit kind of raised a smile, and crab murder's kinda fun. I also see you're only 14, and considering that you've got loads of scope. So keep it up. Hope to see something better than this again soon.

mothballs responds:

Thanks much, this is possibly the best review I've ever gotten. :)